Taking Your Career to a Whole Nother Level
by Cathleen Elise Rossiter
“It’s not what you achieve, it’s what you overcome. That’s what defines your
career.” (Carlton Fisk)
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In my travels I meet so many talented people who have a great deal to contribute yet they just can’t seem to be taken seriously in their respective jobs and by the companies for whom they work.
Maeve, for instance, is a bright, enthusiastic assistant to the head of Human Resources at a local company. She has been in the position for several years. Although she likes the work, she feels it is time to move on in her career, to take on more responsibilities, to be more than an assistant. Maeve wants to be an integral part of the team and she has some great ideas to boost morale and employee ownership of the direction the company is headed – hence the need for a boost in morale. Sadly, Maeve cannot get anyone to listen to her in spite of her e-mails to all the right people. In their eyes, she is just an assistant and a stupid one at that.
Fontaine is another example of a talented individual who remains invisible in the eyes of her co-workers. In her position as store manager for a high-end clothing chain in the city, she has sent e-mails and letters to various members of upper management with ideas on how to improve traffic and influence the purchasing decisions of those coming into the store. Invariably, she receives the standard “thanks but no thanks aren’t you cute for trying” response to her input.
They asked me to look at their letters to see if it was something they said that turned people off. Their ideas were great. Knowing Maeve and Fontaine and the infectious optimism and vision they bring to their work, I would listen carefully to their thoughts, observations, and ideas. After reading their letters, putting aside what I know of them – my personal experience working with them – I saw what the problem was.
The letters and e-mails I read were written from the point of view of an amateur in the language of the street. Therefore, the e-mails and letters told the recipients that the authors were equally as amateur and unfamiliar with the business world. As a business owner, I would never take these suggestions seriously – as is. To follow are my suggestions to Maeve and Fontaine.
- It is perfectly fine to free-write your thoughts in the form of a letter in order to get the thoughts out. The key is not to think that you are finished. You are only beginning. Once the thoughts are on paper, you have to edit several times for several aspects – logical progression, complete thoughts, thoroughness of information, style, grammar and punctuation, jargon and street slang. For example, the phrase “a whole nother [level, thing, issue]” is a dead give-away that you are not ready to move up to the next level. The correct phrase, the one that shows you pay attention is either “an entirely different [level, thing, issue]” or “another [level, thing, issue] entirely”. “Nother” is not a word.
- Write your letter or e-mail in Word or some program outside of your e-mail platform. Edit it to within an inch of its life so that what remains is the core message with nothing extraneous to distract from this core message. Again, edit in several rounds for the following:
- logical progression
- complete thought
- thoroughness of information
- style
- grammar and punctuation
- jargon and street slang
When writing business correspondence, act like you’ve been there before, not like a rookie NFL player doing the Chicken Dance in the end zone after his first touchdown. Write for the position you want to hold, then, write as if you hold a position two places higher.
Regardless of your level of education, or of the quality of that education, you can always elevate the impression you leave on your co-workers and superiors simply by paying attention to what you say and how you say it, making the necessary corrections (or tweakings as I like to call them) as you move forward.